Some people say economic growth is the only way to end world poverty and hunger, while others say economic growth is damaging the environment and must stop. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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keep
supporting economic Verb problem
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growth
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is
a controversial issue. Wrong verb form
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While
some Linking Words
people
insist economic Use synonyms
development
is the only solution to solve world poverty and hunger, other Use synonyms
people
believe Use synonyms
the
economic Correct your spelling
that
growth
is enough already and more Use synonyms
development
is not necessary. I agree with the latter opinion, and I will discuss the reasons Use synonyms
of
both statements in the rest of Change preposition
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this
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growth
is essential to get rid of the poor because it leads to earning more money and makes Use synonyms
people
affordable. The society where it has completed a huge economic Use synonyms
growth
, has more Use synonyms
rooms
for helping the poor. Becoming Fix the agreement mistake
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a
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people
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rich countries Correct article usage
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such
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the
US have Change preposition
as the
the
lower poverty rate Correct article usage
a
comparing
to developing countries. Wrong verb form
compared
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, in Korea, the amount of subsidize for the poor has increased only after getting Linking Words
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remarkable economic Correct article usage
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development
.
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On the other hand
, some Linking Words
people
do not agree with the idea that economic Use synonyms
growth
is essential, which I agree with. The world is already developed enough. The Use synonyms
further
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development
only Use synonyms
damage
the environment. Natural resources Change the verb form
damages
such
as coal and oil are needed to increase Linking Words
economy
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economic
growth
. Because those ingredients are key to Use synonyms
run
plants and Wrong verb form
running
make
products, which are substantial to get Wrong verb form
making
economy
developed. And using resources damages the environment. Correct article usage
the economy
For instance
, global warming is getting worse when more and more countries' economy gets developed.
In conclusion, Linking Words
while
economic Linking Words
growth
can help Use synonyms
reducing
poverty and hunger by allowing Wrong verb form
reduce
people
to be Use synonyms
a
rich, it Correct article usage
apply
also
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cause
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causes
damages
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damage
on
the environment. As more economic Change preposition
to
growth
can be a reason for more damage Use synonyms
on
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to
the
nature, I advocate the opinion where Correct article usage
apply
the
economic Correct determiner usage
that
growth
must stop.Use synonyms
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