Some people say economic growth is the only way to end world poverty and hunger, while others say economic growth is damaging the environment and must stop. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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supporting economic
growth
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a controversial issue.
While
some
people
insist economic
development
is the only solution to solve world poverty and hunger, other
people
believe
the
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economic
growth
is enough already and more
development
is not necessary. I agree with the latter opinion, and I will discuss the reasons
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both statements in the rest of
this
essay. Economic
growth
is essential to get rid of the poor because it leads to earning more money and makes
people
affordable. The society where it has completed a huge economic
growth
, has more
rooms
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for helping the poor. Becoming
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rich should be first to support poor
people
.
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,
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rich countries
such
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US have
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lower poverty rate
comparing
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to developing countries.
Also
, in Korea, the amount of subsidize for the poor has increased only after getting
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remarkable economic
development
.
On the other hand
, some
people
do not agree with the idea that economic
growth
is essential, which I agree with. The world is already developed enough. The
further
development
only
damage
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the environment. Natural resources
such
as coal and oil are needed to increase
economy
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growth
. Because those ingredients are key to
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plants and
make
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products, which are substantial to get
economy
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the economy
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developed. And using resources damages the environment.
For instance
, global warming is getting worse when more and more countries' economy gets developed. In conclusion,
while
economic
growth
can help
reducing
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poverty and hunger by allowing
people
to be
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rich, it
also
cause
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causes
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damages
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damage
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on
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the environment. As more economic
growth
can be a reason for more damage
on
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to
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the
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nature, I advocate the opinion where
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economic
growth
must stop.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic growth
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • Infrastructural development
  • Social services
  • Quality of life
  • Trickle-down effect
  • Poverty alleviation
  • Industrialization
  • Deforestation
  • Climate change
  • Biodiversity
  • Resource depletion
  • Sustainable growth
  • Renewable energy
  • Wellbeing indices
  • Environmental protection
  • Technological advancements
  • Global responsibility
  • Consumer behavior
  • Green technology
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