The line graph shows visitor numbers to 5 attractions in the city of Parkvale from 1996 to 2016

The line graph shows visitor numbers to 5 attractions in the city of Parkvale from 1996 to 2016
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The graph compares the number of
people
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who visited 5 attractions in Parkvale
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between 1996 dan 2016.
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, the National Gallery was by far the most popular venue after 2000,
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the Indigenous Art Centre
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was
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a rise in visitor numbers.
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fewer
people
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went to the aquarium and zoo over the two decades, museum attendance remained fairly stable. In 1996, the aquarium was the main attraction, with over 500,000
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coming through
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in 1996, it
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enjoyed a huge rise in popularity over the next 10 years, peaking at almost 400,000 visitors in 2004 and reaching a similar figure in 2016. By that year,
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, the National Gallery had seen an unparalleled increase in visitors to almost 1 million. Meanwhile, over the period shown, aquarium attendance plummeted by about 400,000, going from the most to the least visited venue. The zoo's figure fell substantially as well, though less dramatically,
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the museum was little deviation from around 450,000 annual visitors.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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