The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The chart depicts the
tea
and coffee
drinking habits of citizens in five different Austrlian
Correct your spelling
Australian
cities
. It is clear that
except Adelaide
, the percentage of residents Change preposition
in Adelaide
went
to a Correct pronoun usage
who went
cafe
is more than bought fresh or instant coffee
in the rest of cities
.
People living in Sydney, Melbourne, Hobart and Brisbane tend to have Correct article usage
the cities
coffee
or tea
in a cafe
, especially in the first three cities
for more than 60%. As for the proportion of instant coffee
bought in these five cities
are
in the range of 45% to 55%, which is Correct subject-verb agreement
is
lesser
than the percentage of people Correct word choice
less
went
to a Correct pronoun usage
who went
cafe
but more than those bought
fresh Correct pronoun usage
who bought
coffee
. Fresh coffee
bought in last
4 weeks Correct article usage
the last
are
the least one that people Change the verb form
is
did
compare to the other two.
In Sydney and Melbourne, the drinking Verb problem
apply
habit
of Fix the agreement mistake
habits
coffee
and tea
are more popular than Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart overall
. However
, instant coffee
and manmade coffee
or tea
in the store are almost at the propotion
about a little bit more than 50% in the former and nearly 50% in the latter.
In conclusion, residents in Correct your spelling
proportion
promotion
proposition
the
four out of five Correct article usage
apply
cities
have
favor Unnecessary verb
apply
in have
Wrong verb form
having
a
Correct article usage
apply
coffee
or tea
in the
Correct article usage
a
cafe
and fresh coffee
are
in the Correct subject-verb agreement
is
last
position among three
drinking habits.Correct article usage
the three
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, cities, cafe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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