You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter • introduce yourself • say why you are interested in this sports club • ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, members, costs

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am Laziza, a student of your college. I am writing to ask for information about membership in the Leo Sports

club

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. As you know, not any

spots

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sports

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facilities in our college. Indeed our students

wants

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to take part in the Leo Sports

club

. I

have known

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that

this

club

is well-known among us. We can take

part-time

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the part-time

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course if you

let

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. As to our main computer course, we can manage both of them. I am

also

interested to know about Leo Sports

club's

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facilities, members and costs. What do you think about the costs? Are there

students

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discounts? Can you give us information about the

club

? I am expecting a comprehensive reply from you about the details of the activities and other information I requested. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

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Your

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faithfully, Laziza.

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While the letter covers all the necessary points, try adding more specific details or examples to make your request clearer and more persuasive.

coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve readability. Group related information together.

coherence cohesion

Consider rephrasing for more natural-sounding expressions, such as 'I would like to know more about the sports club's facilities, costs, and membership options.'

greeting and closing

You have included a proper greeting and closing, which is essential for formal letters.

suitable writing tone

The tone of your letter is polite and suitable for a formal request.

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2Linking words
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1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

141 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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