The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisation from 2008 to 2011.

The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisation from 2008 to 2011.
The given bar chart compares data about how much money developing countries received from 5 various organizations between 2008 and 2011.
Overall
, It was important that the
the
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best
one
that helped a lot and the trend of it increased was Company 2
in contrast
to
Organization
4;
moreover
, the amount of money that all organizations helped was in 2010.
According to
the graph, at the start,
Organization
1, which was the fourth
one
, was 0.75;
then
it climbed and reached the highest point in 2008 by 0.9;
however
, it decreased moderately and touched 0.7 in both 2010 and 2011. The fashion of
Organization
2, the first
one
all the time except in 2008, jumped overwhelmingly. It was 1.3 in 2008 and hit 2.6 in 2011. The second level was for
Organization
3, which had wave direction;
furthermore
, it was 1.5;
thereafter
, it
got
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the nadir in 2009 by 1.7 after that it declined to the minimum mark in 2010 of 1.8. The diagram shows, that
Organization
4 dipped somewhat over in a period of 4 years. In the beginning, it was 0.7 and scored 0.8 in 2011.
In addition
,
Organization
5 had the same trend as the prior
one
, so It was 1.2 in the first year. Later the number was 0.4 in 2011.
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