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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart compares the
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 production of oil in the United Kingdom over a period of 19 years.
Overall
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 , we can see that in
this
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 period of time ,
output
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the output
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 of petroleum was the highest .
However
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 , the drop-off
a
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of
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 natural gas
extreamly
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extremely
 grew and almost reached
the
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petroleum’s results.
To begin
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 , in 1981 the petroleum
manifacture
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manufacture
 increased
fron
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from
 9
energy
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units
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 to 140
energy
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units
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,
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 and had been stable for
fibe
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few
 years. But , the
energy
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units
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were
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declined back to the starting point and extremely fast
arrive
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to
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at
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 the maximum in
the
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2000.
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, the natural gas increased rapidly from 40
till
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to
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 100
energy
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units
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; in 1981 the production showed the best arrangement, after which it
growth
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. Regarding
to
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other fuel,
the
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coal’s
energy
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units
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 in 1981 were 80 and
extremely go
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went
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 down near to 1986 and got 30
energy
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units
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.
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At
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 the end ,the final
energy
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 from one million tonnes of coal became around
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30.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fuel production
  • Trend
  • Steady
  • Fluctuations
  • Significant
  • Milestones
  • Turning point
  • Peak
  • Decline
  • Evolve
  • Notable
  • Summarize
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