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Writing Samples
Band 2

You recently bought a camera while travelling overseas. When you got to your destination you discovered that some important items were missing from the box.

#camera #destination #items #box
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Dear Sir/Madam I am
writting
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writing
this
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 letter to express my
dissatification
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dissatisfaction
 with regard to the camera that
i
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I
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 bought from your company When
i
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I
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 was travelling from
japan
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Japan
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,
i
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I
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 bought the
canon
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Canon
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 series 4 from the international airport.
Although
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 everything was sufficient ,
this
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 camera came up with
charger
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a charger
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 which
is
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was
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 missing from
packaging
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the packaging
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.
This
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 is why ,
i
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I
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 am unable to use my camera.Moving
further
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, there should be two handbooks in the packet, which tells , how it can be used.
Unfourtunetly
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Unfortunately
,
i
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I
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 am missing one of them from
packet
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the packet
a packet
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. I want to be provided
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with
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all the items that
i
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I
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 mentioned above within three business days ,
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otherwise
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otherwise,
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i
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I
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 am going to ask refund
instead
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 of
items
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the items
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. Hopefully, you will
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address
adress
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address
this
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 issue and solve it as soon as possible
your
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you're
you are
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 faithfully.
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Language Accuracy
Make sure to correct spelling mistakes and typos, like 'writting', 'dissatification', 'i', 'Unfourtunetly', 'adress', etc.
Language Accuracy
End your letter with 'Yours faithfully', and use capitalization for proper nouns and sentence beginnings.
Coherence & Cohesion
Provide a brief conclusion summarizing your main points or reiterating your request for a more rounded letter.
Task Achievement
Ensure that you clearly indicate the date of purchase and location for clarity.
Task Achievement
The letter covers all key points: mentioning the missing items and requesting a resolution.
Coherence & Cohesion
Logical structure in terms of stating the complaint, elaborating on the issues, and stating a desired resolution is effective.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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