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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in European country between 1979 and 2004.
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The line graph shows the consumption of
fish
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 and
meat
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 in an unknown European country in
grams
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 per
week
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 per capita. The data was recorded every five years from 1979 till 2004
Overall
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, there is a progressive downward trend in three types of
meat
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, with
chicken
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 being the only
meat
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 with an upward trend in consumption throughout the period. Focusing on descending figures,
fish
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 demonstrated a gradual decrease from just above 50
grams
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 per
week
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 to 40
grams
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;
however
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,
fish
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 was the most unpopular option at the beginning and remained placing the bottom. Next, starting from 150
grams
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 per
week
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, lamb suffered a rapid decrease finishing with the starting amount of
fish
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. Beef, in fact, experienced a dive at the beginning, but recovered to the mark of 240
grams
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 per
week
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,
then
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 in 1989, the sharpest decline happened, and continued until the rate of 100
grams
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 per
week
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. Turning to the ascending one, the
chicken
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 fluctuated slightly during the whole time.
Moreover
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, by 1994, it had already doubled in size, reaching 220
grams
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 per
week
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. From 1994 to 1999 no significant changes were shown,
whereas
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 by 2004, the trend of
chicken
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 started to moderately grow.
Finally
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, in 2004
chicken
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 ended as the most popular type of
meat
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 among the other three options.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, meat, grams, week, chicken with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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