The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.

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The bar chart provides key information about the proportion of individuals going

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cinemas in one European city on different days.The units are measured in percentage.

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, it is clear from the graph that

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over the years Saturday has been

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highest rate compared to weekdays.

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Sunday is still the highest of the remaining days,

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group 2 had a lower rate compared

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groups.

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what is shown, on Monday, Tuesday and Thursday, the proportions of cinema visitors showed many fluctuations, and its peaks were under 15% in 2005, 20% in 2003 and around 18% in 2007 respectively. Over that time, a lower percentage of people went to

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place on Wednesday, falling from over 15% to under 10%. In terms of looking at the figures on weekend 40% of individuals had visited the cinema on Saturday by 2003, 10% higher than Sunday. Both figures

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climbed by roughly 10% in the following two years before a decline of approximately 5% in 2007.

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