The teaching of Information Technology (computers) has become a standard part of the curriculum in most secondary schools. The same is now happening in primary schools, where children as young as six are learning how to use computers. However, there is a danger that IT skills are being taught at the expense of more basic skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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computer learning is being used more and more in primary and secondary schools
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between 6 and younger, which could lead to the lack of
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knowledge about basic
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problems as being a major subject,
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other courses will be less valuable for pupils.
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age, usually pupils are still exploring the outside world step by step, and other complicated courses could cause the demotivation of learning and
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from more important things for their physical and mental development.
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of students
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great development, and spending a lot of time in front of monitors could harm their natural way of forming personality.
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children
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UNESCO of 2020 in an early level of
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, it is preferred to teach
children
to communicate with the world and prepare them for self-service, after embracing all these
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IT studying. In conclusion,
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concentration
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on teaching the pupils
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basic
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knowledge about IT and other difficult subjects.
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