The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care of their children in the evening in 2022.
The given bar chart represents the average
time
spent of
Change preposition
by
a
parents in an unidentified country taking care of their children during Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
evening
period in 2022.
Correct article usage
the evening
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that the mother spent majority
of their Add an article
the majority
time
on
dressing up and teaching Change preposition
apply
homework
, whereas
that
Correct determiner usage
the
of
Change preposition
apply
time
spent on active activities like playing games and prepararing
before bed Correct your spelling
preparing
founded
to be equal in Wrong verb form
was found
both
parents. However
, it is interesting to note fathers accounted for fewest
Add an article
a fewest
the fewest
time
in all of the comparing Fix the agreement mistake
times
acitivies
.
Correct your spelling
activities
To begin
with, at about 75%, the mothers spent the greatest amount of time
on
dressing up their children, followed by teaching Change preposition
apply
homework
at 50% and preparing for bed at 42%. Surprisingly, both
of them having
quality Wrong verb form
had
time
with their loved ones in
playing games at 70% and preparing for bed at 50% Change preposition
by
while
homework
and dressing done
together at 38% and 22%, respectively. Add a missing verb
were done
Moreover
, it is obvious that the fathers solely spent fewer
Correct quantifier usage
less
time
with their kins
than Fix the agreement mistake
kin
his
counterparts Correct pronoun usage
their
of
less than 10% in all of the activities. To be specific, the fathers used 10% of their Change preposition
apply
time
in generally
to teaching Change the word
general
homework
, whereas
that of both
playing games and preparing for bed at half of homework
at 5% and that of dressing accounted for only 2%.
In summary, it is noticeable that the mothers play major
role in looking after their babies compared with their spouses. Meanwhile, when it comes to choir and Add an article
a major
educational
the mother Replace the word
education
took
the lead Wrong verb form
takes
while
quality time
both
of
Change preposition
apply
the
parents will Correct article usage
apply
done
together.Change the verb form
do
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