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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care of their children in the evening in 2022.

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care of their children in the evening in 2022.
#bar #percentage #parents #country #time #care #children
The given bar chart represents the average
time
 spent
of
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a
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parents in an unidentified country taking care of their children during
evening
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the evening
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 period in 2022.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that the mother spent
majority
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the majority
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 of their
time
on
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dressing up and teaching
homework
,
whereas
that
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the
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of
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time
 spent on active activities like playing games and
prepararing
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preparing
 before bed
founded
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was found
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 to be equal in
both
 parents.
However
, it is interesting to note fathers accounted for
fewest
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a fewest
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time
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times
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 in all of the comparing
acitivies
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activities
.
To begin
 with, at about 75%, the mothers spent the greatest amount of
time
on
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dressing up their children, followed by teaching
homework
 at 50% and preparing for bed at 42%. Surprisingly,
both
 of them
having
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had
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 quality
time
 with their loved ones
in
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 playing games at 70% and preparing for bed at 50%
while
homework
 and dressing
done
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were done
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 together at 38% and 22%, respectively.
Moreover
, it is obvious that the fathers solely spent
fewer
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less
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time
 with their
kins
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kin
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 than
his
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their
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 counterparts
of
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less than 10% in all of the activities. To be specific, the fathers used 10% of their
time
 in
generally
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 to teaching
homework
,
whereas
 that of
both
 playing games and preparing for bed at half of
homework
 at 5% and that of dressing accounted for only 2%. In summary, it is noticeable that the mothers play
major
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a major
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 role in looking after their babies compared with their spouses. Meanwhile, when it comes to choir and
educational
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education
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 the mother
took
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takes
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 the lead
while
 quality
time
both
of
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the
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parents will
done
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 together.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, homework, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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