The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care of their children in the evening in 2022.

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care of their children in the evening in 2022.
The given bar chart represents the average
time
spent
of
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a
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parents in an unidentified country taking care of their children during
evening
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the evening
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period in 2022.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that the mother spent
majority
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the majority
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of their
time
on
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dressing up and teaching
homework
,
whereas
that
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of
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time
spent on active activities like playing games and
prepararing
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preparing
before bed
founded
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was found
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to be equal in
both
parents.
However
, it is interesting to note fathers accounted for
fewest
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a fewest
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time
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times
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in all of the comparing
acitivies
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activities
.
To begin
with, at about 75%, the mothers spent the greatest amount of
time
on
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dressing up their children, followed by teaching
homework
at 50% and preparing for bed at 42%. Surprisingly,
both
of them
having
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quality
time
with their loved ones
in
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playing games at 70% and preparing for bed at 50%
while
homework
and dressing
done
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were done
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together at 38% and 22%, respectively.
Moreover
, it is obvious that the fathers solely spent
fewer
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less
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time
with their
kins
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kin
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than
his
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their
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counterparts
of
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less than 10% in all of the activities. To be specific, the fathers used 10% of their
time
in
generally
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to teaching
homework
,
whereas
that of
both
playing games and preparing for bed at half of
homework
at 5% and that of dressing accounted for only 2%. In summary, it is noticeable that the mothers play
major
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role in looking after their babies compared with their spouses. Meanwhile, when it comes to choir and
educational
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education
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the mother
took
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the lead
while
quality
time
both
of
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the
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parents will
done
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do
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together.
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