The line graph illustrates the amount of visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries over a period of eighteen years between 1996 and 2014.

The line graph illustrates the amount of visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries over a period of eighteen years between 1996 and 2014.
The graph shows the amount of visitor spend for
visitors
to New Zealand from Australia, USA, UK, Japan and China in eighteen years from 1996 to 2014.
To begin
with, it is clear almost all the lines have an increasing trend. Australia has the biggest fluctuation compared to the other four and
then
end
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ended
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up
2000
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with 2000
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expenditure in 2014 which means it
have
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had
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about 1000
visitors
higher in 1996, Australia in 2006 it's the peak and had 2500 expenditure.
On the other hand
, china in 2014 had the lowest expenditure in all years except between 2001 and 2005.
However
,
china
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China
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had 400
visitors
in 2014.
Moreover
, USA and UK
have
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had
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800 and 450 visitor spend respectively but both increased to 1200 and 850 visitor spend. Japan is the only one which has the approximately same amount (500)
visitors
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of visitors
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at the beginning and
at the end
of the line graph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • visitor spend
  • over a period of
  • eighteen years
  • between 1996 and 2014
  • general trend
  • observed
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuations
  • a breakdown of
  • spending habits
  • comparison
  • highest spenders
  • lowest spenders
  • possible reasons
  • economic conditions
  • tourism promotions
  • significant events
  • specific significant peaks
  • drops in spending
  • corresponding years
  • impact of external factors
  • global financial crisis
  • natural disasters
  • summarizing
  • overall trend
  • implications
  • tourism industry
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