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The pie charts show the results of a survey conducted by a university on the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services.

The pie charts show the results of a survey conducted by a university on the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services.
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The presented pie charts compare data from the survey that one university did about students' view of
work
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 in both situation and their facilities.
Overall
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, It was important that people who spent all their time on
work
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 had more satisfaction from IT support
instead
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 from another one ;
moreover
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, both groups believed that their hours of
work
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 were perfect.
According to
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 the IT support diagrams, nearly half of the people who
work
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 full-time thought it was very good
also
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, roughly a third of them chose Quite;
however
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, 13% of them selected Not at all.
In contrast
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, the proportion of part-time workers was 10% less than the main percentage in the
last
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 one chose not at all;
additionally
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, 35% and 20% respectively were for Quite and Very. The working hours graphs illustrate both communities had a major proportion of Very, but part-time had more number;
then
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 they were Quit by 32% and 23% for full and part-time;
furthermore
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, for Not at all a tiny number was for full and 5% was for part-time.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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