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Many first year university students discover that their chosen subjects do not suit them.Why does this happen? What can be done to ensure that students choose a suitable subject?

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In the contemporary epoch ,
subject
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 selection plays an important role in shaping the
future
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 of an individual. Learning and understanding the
future
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prospect
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 will help to choose a respective major as a freshman.Numerous complications are faced by undergraduates
while
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 opting for
major
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a major
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 in
first
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the first
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 -year of university ,as they are not aware of their
field
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 of interest and lack
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cognizant
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.
Firstly
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,choosing a
subject
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 will define your career. Most of the
students
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 are unaware of which course to opt for since the majority of them are not properly
conselled
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consulted
. Counselling plays a significant role in determining your interests and providing
students
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 with guidance keeping in view
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future
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 demands.
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, studies have shown that nearly 76% of
students
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 are not properly counselled in the institutions placing their
future
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 at stake.
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another reason for not deciding what to choose is
lack
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 of self-evaluation ability .
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 determines
students
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'
field
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 of interest. It
also
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 develops awareness about specific fields so that no impedance comes in the way.
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; reports state that undergrads are more likely to change their chosen
field
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 as they fail
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.
As a result
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., it is important that
students
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 must take proper counselling from teachers or
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experts following
self assessments
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self-assessments
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..
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 In order to ensure that the correct
subject
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 has been chosen, it is important that a freshman studies every
field
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 thoroughly and matches his interests so that he may not struggle to choose a
subject
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.
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,careful research must be done before opting for a particular
field
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.
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, taking suggestions from
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experts
of
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in
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 the
field
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 will facilitate
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decision making
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,.
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Moreover
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, it is important that teachers expound the fields that match the
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students
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student's
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 personality and intrinsic mindset.
To conclude
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, it is imperative that institutions arrange proper classes for
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 guidance and endorse collaborative learning ,because it will widen their horizons and will help to shape their prosperous
future
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.It is
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 suggested that
diverse
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a diverse
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 learning
ambiance
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ambience
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 should be provided to the scholars to cultivate multiple skills.
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