The given bar chart depicts the ratio of the most expected films based on types for men and women, and the pie chart indicates the number of ticket sales for each type in the USA, in 2010.

The given bar chart depicts the ratio of the most expected films based on types for men and women, and the pie chart indicates the number of ticket sales for each type in the USA, in 2010.
The presented bar chart shows the amount of the
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preferable
movies based on the genres for both sexes, and the pie chart explains the Box-office takings for each type in
USA
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the USA
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, in 2010. From
overall
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an overall
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prespective
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perspective
, it can be seen that there was a significant difference,
while
the most popular category for men was action, most
of
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women
like to watch romantic
comedy
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comedies
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. Examining the first feature, action films
witnessed
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were witnessed
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as the most wanted genre for men in 2010, with 40
from
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in
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total,
while
for
women
only 25.
This
trend followed closely behind
to
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the other masculine cinema like thriller and science fiction that the
proporion
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proportion
of men occupied almost two-fold from
women
.
Additionally
, girls and boys were on the
equal
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same
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level for
comedy
and
western
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Western
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type of
movie
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movies
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.
Subsequently
, the most striking feature was
for
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of
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romentic
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romantic
comedy
. It was the highest number for
women
in exactly 30 but it was the least famous for
man
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men
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,
which
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with
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only 5% of the total population
chose
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choosing
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those films. Moving on to the pie chart, the largest segment was for action
that
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which
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occupied
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occupying
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for
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almost
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the almost
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half
ratio
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the ratio
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of the proportion.
Moreover
, the second biggest number was for
comedy
that
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which
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has less than a quarter. The next position was for romantic
comedy
and thriller
that is
12% and 10% respectively.
Lastly
, only 5% of people picked the other genres.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, comedy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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