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AI art repersents a groundbreaking leap in artistic innovation, pushing the boundaries and challenging the conventional notions of human artistic expression – a threat to the essence of art. Discuss both views and give your opinion.[819]

#art #repersents #leap #innovation #boundaries #notions #expression #threat #essence
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With the ongoing cultivation of AI in the
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 industry comes a pertinent question of whether the utilization of AI in creative spaces should be continued. Some advocate that AI
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 a groundbreaking leap
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innocation
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innovation
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 the boundaries. Others,
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this
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 statement as they claim that AI
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 poses a threat to the conventional notions of human artistic expression. From my perspective, the latter is clearly more convincing and in what follows, I will provide relevant evidence and reasoning to
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 stance. Optimists point out that we are making considerable headway with the rapid advancement in the sophistication of AI.
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 some may laugh
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 the idea that AI is refined enough to replace
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 when it sometimes responds to questions with complete nonsense, it is already providing
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 with many obstacles in various industries, and
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no exception. Indeed, with just a simple command and a click of a button, AI can create a visual of any kind right in front of our eyes, and transform it into a work of
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. Avowedly,
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 view is valid, but only to some extent. The aforementioned practice brings about concerns
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 plagiarism. With the case of Stable Diffusion, people are
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 the fact that the dataset, whose purpose is to train the AI, contains artworks by artists and they are utilizing these without giving the artists proper credit or compensation. Plus the lack of options for individuals to remove photos in the database and there is, technically, no “
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paper trail
 that allows us to fast-check an assertion”, as Steven Pinker has stated in her interview with Alvin Powell,
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creates a serious problem of AI
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 competitors potentially “cheating”, taking advantage of AI.
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 the convenience and pre-eminence of AI are clearly
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, it
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 not doing the creative things that conventional
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are
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. As Moshe Safdie stated : “Intelligence assumes a certain independence and consciousness, which I do not think AI has right now”.
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 AI can imitate things that are already known and regurgitate them in another format,
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 not an original work.
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 these generators will distort artworks to a certain standard, human artists can provide their service to everyone without any discrimination and can truly capture all the qualities that make an individual unique and beautiful,
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 of washing
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 away or turning them into a different being. These are what make traditional
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 have an advantage over AI
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. To reiterate, the problem of AI
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 is yet to be solved, but with the right treatments and measures, AI could potentially become our collaborator and deliver new possibilities. But for now, people should be
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aware
 of the immense consequences AI brings.
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Grammar
Pay attention to minor spelling and grammatical errors to improve clarity and readability, such as 'ar', 'innocation', and 'awae' which should be 'are', 'innovation', and 'aware' respectively.
Grammar
Ensure consistent use of singular and plural forms for better accuracy, e.g. 'providing human with many obstacles' should be 'providing humans with many opportunities'.
Task achievement
Expand on examples with more detail or depth to fully illustrate your points. For instance, you mentioned Stable Diffusion, but did not give a detailed example of how plagiarism occurred.
Coherence and cohesion
Link your paragraphs more smoothly for better coherence. Use transitional phrases like 'However', 'Moreover', or 'On the contrary' to better connect ideas and arguments.
Task achievement
The essay provides a clear opinion that AI art poses a threat to the essence of art.
Coherence and cohesion
Good structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, making it easier to follow the argument.
Task achievement
Attempts to present both sides of the argument before giving a personal opinion, which is commendable for a balanced perspective.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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