Some people say that schools should teach good behavior to children and introduce them to "right" and "wrong". Parents should not be the only once responsible. Do you agree or disagree?

Many people believe that kids who
studying
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at
school
might
be
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learnt
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learn
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good
behavior
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behaviour
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and be taught about right and wrong
things
, it without
be
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to require not only from
parents
. I partly agree that
school
is somewhere where children learn first
things
and teachers should be an
example
of good demeanour. In modern society, the personality of children is being formed in
school
, not with
school
programmes and a lesson about
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values.
Theachers
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The teachers
affect
to
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the pupils as an
example
of
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person
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people
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.
For
example
, they
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their time with learners and they want to be
as
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like
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them and to try to do as like
they
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them
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.In
additionally
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, good
behavior
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behaviour
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depends on
classmates
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the classmates
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of a child in
school
.
Because working
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with them everyday,
create
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a connection with
coleaners
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co-workers
.
For instance
, before meeting a teacher, they
met
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classmates and talk with them.
However
, I partly
dissagree
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disagree
with that
parents
should
to
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apply
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teach them about good and wrong
things
before going to
school
. Meanwhile,
parents
also
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are also
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an
example
of good behavior. To give an
example
, a child repeats
things
in
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outside
what
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of what
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parents
do. In conclusion,
school
and
a
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home of
parents
become places where children get
first
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their first
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lifehood
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livelihood
education.
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