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The best way to reduce poverty is to provide at least 6 years of free education for all children to learn to listen,read and count the number.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Every individual needs to understand the importance of calculation, reading and listening analytically in order to decrease
poverty
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 rate, and providing free
education
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 for 6 years can have
great
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 impact on it. I completely agree with
this
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 statement, because primary
education
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 can
atleast
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at least
 help
people
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in
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 their
day to day
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day-to-day
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 life and the provision of more free
education
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 might affect other essential services of the government. The importance of the
education
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 is undeniable in any circumstances. There are so many
people
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 left behind, just because they don't have
proper
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a proper
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education
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,
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, they are very hardworking. Anyone can fool them and take all the benefits that they deserve.
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, in Nepal, more
that
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than
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 50% of
people
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 are completely
illeterate
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illiterate
, and they
dont
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don't
 understand the basic calculations, read letters, and understand the meaning of many words, which
made
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makes
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 them transfer their whole property to their
debitors
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debtors
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. Providing free
education
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 to the residents for
longer
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a longer
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 time can be
benificial
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beneficial
 without any doubt,
however
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,
state
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the state
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 needs to think about other important factors,
such
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 as health, infrastructure developments and poverty reduction, which demand some funds too. All developing countries can not afford to spend a huge amount of budget only on
education
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. India,
for instance
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, is offering free
education
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 for
the
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apply
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girls to inspire them, but the state
also
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 needs to allocate some money to the health sectors as
their
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 are so many
people
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 suffering around the slum area in
surge
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a surge
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 of the health provisions. In conclusion, the essence of free
education
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 for
atleast
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at least
 6 years is very important
due to
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 the fact that it provides
people
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an
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 opportunity to deal with
simple
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the simple
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problem
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problems
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 in their regular life, and
government
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the government
a government
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 would not be able to provide
long term
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long-term
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education
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 without any charge.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure consistent spelling and grammar. Phrases like 'atleast' should be 'at least,' and 'illeterate' should be 'illiterate.'
coherence cohesion
Use linking words more effectively to create a smoother flow between ideas. Phrases like 'Nevertheless' and 'However' should be used correctly to connect contrasting points.
task achievement
Further elaborate on key points and provide more detailed explanations. Avoid vague statements and provide deeper analysis where possible.
coherence cohesion
Divide long paragraphs into smaller ones to increase readability. Each paragraph should ideally convey a single main idea.
supported main points
Good use of examples to support arguments, such as referencing Nepal and India to illustrate points.
complete response
Clear understanding of the topic and the prompt, with a focused response on how free education can reduce poverty.
introduction conclusion present
Well-structured introduction and conclusion that summarize the main ideas effectively.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • socio-economic background
  • basic learning
  • essential skills
  • personal and professional growth
  • educated populace
  • economic benefits
  • future workforce
  • innovation
  • productivity
  • unemployment rates
  • social equity
  • bridging the gap
  • underprivileged children
  • socio-economic status
  • cycle of poverty
  • long-term solution
  • immediate measures
  • financial aid
  • healthcare
  • social safety nets
  • robust educational policies
  • global examples
  • substantial investment
  • infrastructure
  • trained teachers
  • learning materials
  • effective implementation
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