Some people think scientific research should focus on solving world health problems. Others think that there are more important issues. Discuss both views and give your opinion.[233]
In
this
day and age, science is deemed to be the greatest collective Linking Words
endeavor
in light of the advantages it has brought forth for Change the spelling
endeavour
the
humanity. For some people, scientific research should only focus on solving world Correct article usage
apply
health
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problems
, Use synonyms
while
others hold the opinion that there are more important issues. From my perspective, I Linking Words
accord
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agree
to
the latter opinion.
On the one hand, it’s true Change preposition
with
health
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problems
worldwide are bones of contention Use synonyms
needing
to be tackled. If not addressed timely, those Wrong verb form
that need
problems
can have adverse impacts on people’s well-being and mentality, on a wider scale, it can even be pandemics or epidemics. Use synonyms
Moreover
, Linking Words
health
sciences Use synonyms
also
improve our Linking Words
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lives
conditions. It contributes to ensuring a longer and healthier life, monitors our Replace the word
living
health
, Use synonyms
Correct word choice
and build
build
us Change the verb form
builds
heathy
diets, Correct your spelling
healthy
healthy
bodies,….which leads to not only better physical Correct word choice
and healthy
health
but Use synonyms
also
relaxing mental conditions. Linking Words
Therefore
, without Linking Words
health
sciences, our Use synonyms
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lives
quality would deteriorate, there would be Change the noun form
life
downward
trend in life expectancies, more possibilities of Add an article
a downward
pandemic
or epidemic in light of the lack of medicine. No cure for terminal illness in the future,…. Correct article usage
a pandemic
For example
, the Covid-19 pandemic Linking Words
which
has posed dire threats to people’s physical and mental well-being and finances. Without the timely arrival of vaccines, it would have been as deadly as previous plagues in history, Correct pronoun usage
apply
such
as the Black Death or the Spanish Flu.
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On the other hand
, only Linking Words
health
care is not enough to cater for humanity, our Use synonyms
lives
are composed of a large scale of other factors. First and foremost, there are other Use synonyms
critcal
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critical
problems
that play havoc with human Use synonyms
lives
other than Use synonyms
health
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problems
. Indeed, a wide range of Use synonyms
researchs
carried out all over the world Correct your spelling
research
have
indicated Correct subject-verb agreement
has
most
pressing issues on Earth, and Correct article usage
the most
health
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problems
are just small parts of the whole, some can even downgrade Use synonyms
the
humanity on a wider scale. Take Correct article usage
apply
pollutions
as an example, there are many types of Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
pollutions
, each Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
detertoriating
our Correct your spelling
deteriorating
lives
in different ways. Air Use synonyms
polluion
Correct your spelling
pollution
increased
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increases
risk
of heart disease, wheezing, coughing, Correct article usage
the risk
and
respiratory Correct word choice
apply
problems
and skin, nose, and throat irritation, which are Use synonyms
health
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problems
needing to be tackled. Another problem is famine which Use synonyms
result
in malnutrition, starvation, disease, and high death rates. Change the verb form
results
Moreover
, human Linking Words
lives
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also
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requires
social facets, Change the verb form
require
such
as communications and education. Those aspects are made easier, more convenient and more comprehensive thanks to technological inventions.
All things considered, Linking Words
while
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health
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problems
pose great risks to Use synonyms
human’s
well-being, scientific research should not be solely conducted to solve them alone but should rather be directed towards other pressing matters as well.Change noun form
human
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
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