The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufacturers in the years 2005 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufacturers in the years 

2005 and 2006.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where 

relevant.
The illustration below shows the international
market
share
of different mobile phones for
manufacturers
in the years 2005 and 2006.
Overall
, Nokia dominated the largest
percentage
in both consecutive years from 2005 and 2006.
While
some combined other phone
manufacturers
got the second highest
percentage
in the
year
2005, it declined to third in rank in the
year
2006. The third biggest in sales in the
year
2005 was Motorola. Motorola soared even higher, as the second largest
market
share
in the
year
2006.
However
mobile
manufacturers
like Samsung, Sony Ericsson, LG and BenQ Mobile remained the least
percentage
on
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market
share
. The most dominant in the
year
2005 was Nokia as it had a 32.5%
market
share
.
Moreover
, it maintained its dominance by the following
year
(2006) with a 35%
market
share
. It was followed by combined other mobile
manufacturers
by 19.2% recorded in the
year
2005.
While
other phone companies ranked second in the
year
2005, it dropped to 16.2% in the
year
2006.
However
, Motorola which ranked third
on
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the
year
2005 with 17.7% of the
market
share
, rose higher in the following
year
(2006) with 21.1%.
On the other hand
, Samsung got the fourth spot on the biggest
market
share
in 2005 with a 12.7% recorded
percentage
. But during the
year
2006 Samsung’s
market
share
dropped to 11.8%.
While
other phone companies like Sony Ericsson, LG, and BenQ Mobile got the least
market
share
for both years of 2005 to 2006 with only 2.4% to 7.4% range of
market
share
.
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