Some people think that with combined effort on the part of the government and society crime can be completely eradicated, while others argue that this is completely hypothetical, and that crime has always been present in societies even in an ancient time. Discuss these two views. Which one do you agree with?
It is debated among the people that both
of
authority and community engagements can help eliminate illegal Change preposition
apply
act
. Fix the agreement mistake
acts
However
, some nations opposed to
Change preposition
apply
such
an idea, and think that violation has been existed
during our Change to the active voice
existed
ancestors
time. Change noun form
ancestor's
ancestors'
Although
it is hard to get rid of all crimes in the world, I believe that at least it helps to mitigate the misdemenour
and victimization in the societies.
Correct your spelling
misdemeanour
To begin
with, psychological factors are the most concern
issues, leading people to commit Replace the word
concerning
a
Correct article usage
apply
violent
. Replace the word
violence
For instance
, a person have
anger, stress issues, or financial problems could change Change the verb form
has
they
behaviours. Correct pronoun usage
their
Therefore
, the public can implement a support group or workshops on how to manage personal feeling
to help them Fix the agreement mistake
feelings
handles
Correct subject-verb agreement
handle
such
an emotion to avoid an aggressive act on somebody. In addition
, the government should stricter
laws to reduce Add a missing verb
have stricter
the
crimes. When Correct article usage
apply
carried
out capital punishment for those who Wrong verb form
carrying
has
committed serious felonies Change the verb form
have
such
as murder, rape, drug-related offenses and others. As a result
, many people will think twice before acting, plus the one who had committed to felony
will not Add an article
a felony
able
to do it again as the punishment is death.
Add a missing verb
be able
On the other hand
, no one can deny that despite having established laws over the years, trangressives
still happen. It is common to assume that insufficient enforcement of the laws Correct your spelling
transgressive
progressives
trigger
re-offended to repeat their mistakes. Change the verb form
triggers
For example
, in Afghanistan, war crime
and Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
crime
against humanity Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
still
Add a missing verb
are still
on going
without any resolution. Correct your spelling
ongoing
Moreover
, corruption in the police community has Correct article usage
an affect
affect
on how the felony Correct your spelling
effect
being
determined. Wrong verb form
is
For instance
, Change preposition
in third
third world
countries, all sorts of criminals can be legal by providing Add a hyphen
third-world
a
large Correct article usage
apply
amount
of bribes to officers.
In conclusion, I agree with the latter view as the matter of crime Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
exists
long before our time, Wrong verb form
existed
cosidering
Correct your spelling
considering
the
human greediness and inadequate Correct article usage
apply
of
law Change preposition
apply
enforcements
. Fix the agreement mistake
enforcement
However
, it is significant to address this events
, or at least to minimise the misdeed in Change the determiner
this event
these events
the
society, ensuring Correct article usage
apply
the
better and Correct article usage
a
harmonious
world for the next generations.Correct quantifier usage
more harmonious
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grammar
Some sentences are grammatically incorrect or awkward. For example: 'a person have anger, stress issues, or financial problems could change they behaviours.' Consider revising for accuracy and clarity.
task response
Develop the argument further with additional examples or by elaborating on existing ones. For instance, the essay can benefit from more detailed discussion on how community efforts can mitigate crime.
grammar
Ensure consistency in tense and subject-verb agreement. For example: 'a person have anger' should be 'a person has anger'.
structure
You've provided a structured response with clear introduction and conclusion.
task response
The essay discusses both perspectives and includes relevant examples.
content
Your essay demonstrates an understanding of the complexity of the issue, acknowledging that complete eradication of crime is challenging but not impossible to mitigate.
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