Some people think that with combined effort on the part of the government and society crime can be completely eradicated, while others argue that this is completely hypothetical, and that crime has always been present in societies even in an ancient time. Discuss these two views. Which one do you agree with?

It is debated among the people that both
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authority and community engagements can help eliminate illegal
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.
However
, some nations opposed
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such
an idea, and think that violation has
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during our
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time.
Although
it is hard to get rid of all crimes in the world, I believe that at least it helps to mitigate the
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misdemeanour
and victimization in the societies.
To begin
with, psychological factors are the most
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issues, leading people to commit
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violent
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.
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, a person
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anger, stress issues, or financial problems could change
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behaviours.
Therefore
, the public can implement a support group or workshops on how to manage personal
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to help them
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such
an emotion to avoid an aggressive act on somebody.
In addition
, the government should
stricter
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laws to reduce
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crimes. When
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out capital punishment for those who
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committed serious felonies
such
as murder, rape, drug-related offenses and others.
As a result
, many people will think twice before acting, plus the one who had committed to
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will not
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to do it again as the punishment is death.
On the other hand
, no one can deny that despite having established laws over the years,
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transgressive
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still happen. It is common to assume that insufficient enforcement of the laws
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re-offended to repeat their mistakes.
For example
, in Afghanistan, war
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and
crime
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against humanity
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on going
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without any resolution.
Moreover
, corruption in the police community has
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on how the felony
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determined.
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third world
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countries, all sorts of criminals can be legal by providing
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large
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of bribes to officers. In conclusion, I agree with the latter view as the matter of crime
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long before our time,
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considering
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human greediness and inadequate
of
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law
enforcements
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.
However
, it is significant to address
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, or at least to minimise the misdeed in
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society, ensuring
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better and
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world for the next generations.
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grammar
Some sentences are grammatically incorrect or awkward. For example: 'a person have anger, stress issues, or financial problems could change they behaviours.' Consider revising for accuracy and clarity.
task response
Develop the argument further with additional examples or by elaborating on existing ones. For instance, the essay can benefit from more detailed discussion on how community efforts can mitigate crime.
grammar
Ensure consistency in tense and subject-verb agreement. For example: 'a person have anger' should be 'a person has anger'.
structure
You've provided a structured response with clear introduction and conclusion.
task response
The essay discusses both perspectives and includes relevant examples.
content
Your essay demonstrates an understanding of the complexity of the issue, acknowledging that complete eradication of crime is challenging but not impossible to mitigate.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • eradicate
  • surveillance
  • education systems
  • stricter laws
  • community policing
  • social welfare programs
  • root causes
  • poverty
  • inequality
  • inherent part of society
  • historical perspectives
  • psychological factors
  • social dynamics
  • criminal behavior
  • enduring examples
  • success stories
  • strategies
  • inevitability
  • exhaustive efforts
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