Some people think that with combined effort on the part of the government and society crime can be completely eradicated, while others argue that this is completely hypothetical, and that crime has always been present in societies even in an ancient time. Discuss these two views. Which one do you agree with?

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It is debated among the people that both

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authority and community engagements can help eliminate illegal

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, some nations opposed

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time.

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it is hard to get rid of all crimes in the world, I believe that at least it helps to mitigate the

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and victimization in the societies.

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with, psychological factors are the most

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issues, leading people to commit

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anger, stress issues, or financial problems could change

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behaviours.

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to help them

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an emotion to avoid an aggressive act on somebody.

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, the government should

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laws to reduce

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crimes. When

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out capital punishment for those who

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committed serious felonies

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as murder, rape, drug-related offenses and others.

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, many people will think twice before acting, plus the one who had committed to

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will not

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to do it again as the punishment is death.

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, no one can deny that despite having established laws over the years,

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still happen. It is common to assume that insufficient enforcement of the laws

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re-offended to repeat their mistakes.

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, in Afghanistan, war

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against humanity

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without any resolution.

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, corruption in the police community has

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on how the felony

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determined.

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countries, all sorts of criminals can be legal by providing

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large

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of bribes to officers. In conclusion, I agree with the latter view as the matter of crime

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long before our time,

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human greediness and inadequate

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law

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, it is significant to address

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, or at least to minimise the misdeed in

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society, ensuring

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better and

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world for the next generations.

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Develop the argument further with additional examples or by elaborating on existing ones. For instance, the essay can benefit from more detailed discussion on how community efforts can mitigate crime.

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Ensure consistency in tense and subject-verb agreement. For example: 'a person have anger' should be 'a person has anger'.

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You've provided a structured response with clear introduction and conclusion.

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The essay discusses both perspectives and includes relevant examples.

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Your essay demonstrates an understanding of the complexity of the issue, acknowledging that complete eradication of crime is challenging but not impossible to mitigate.

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