The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of 

new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and 

make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart provides information about closures and openings in one nation in years between 2011 and 2018.
Overall
, statistics for opening a new market were the highest in 2011, but
at the end
of
this
period,
this
trend faced the lowest point of it. Closures of the market fluctuated, but in the end, remained steady.
To begin
, the maximum amount of openings was in 2011 approximately 8.500.
However
, in the following year,
this
measurement decreased gradually to slightly under 4000. In the next 2 years,
this
trend increased at a consistent rate. Between 2015 and 2017, rates were roughly equal to each other.
Finally
, measurements face the lowest point of 3000 in 2018. Closing a business was under 6500 in 2011. After some fluctuations, in 2013,
this
rate reached its peak approximately 7000 entrepreneurs decided to close their businesses. In 2014, these stats decreased to 6500.
Consequently
, in 2015, the number of businessfolks that decided to stop their firm was the minimal level which is under 1000.
However
, the attitude toward closing the organization soared sharply in 2016 and remained steady until 2018.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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