The table below shows the percentage of first year students who gave ‘very good’ rating to the resources provided by the college, for three courses.

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The provided table indicates the number of students who

acheived

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achieved

well grades in the three various courses of college in the first level of

university

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the university

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. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest percentage of getting

best

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the best

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marks by

scholar

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scholars

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was for teaching

Economics

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and

Commerce

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and

also

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Pre-course information for

Commerce

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,learners did not reach

very

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good rating in Pre-course information in

Economics

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. The percentage of

first year

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first-year

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students who gave well level in teaching courses for

Economics

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was the same as teaching

Commerce

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at %95.(Which was the highest number of

grade

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grades

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over the period).

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,the number of students who reached

best

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the best

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marks in their tutor course for

Commerce

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was %93,just ahead of

tutor

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the tutor

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course for

Economics

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at %90.

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,scholars did not get

very

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good rate in their Pre-course information in

Economics

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at %59.(Which was the

least

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lowest

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percentage of level over the whole year).

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,getting very good marks in Resources (print)

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learners in

Commerce

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was

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a bit as popular as

Economics

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at %85 and %81,respectively.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

167 words

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The table below shows the percentage of first year students who gave ‘very good’ rating to the resources provided by the college, for three courses.

People can eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

You recently stayed at your friends's place to look after the house while he/she is away. you accidently damaged something in his/her house. write a letter to your friend. in your lettter you should describe what the accident was explain when it happened. suggest how you damage can be fixed.

Topic: Some people say that poor students or students who come from rural areas often find it difficult to have access to university education. What should be done to solve this problem? 250 words.