You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter say why he/she would not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

Dear Ali I hope
this
letter finds you well. it was great to hear from you. I am glad you have considered me
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this
significant decision.Ali, 1 understand, your hesitation about college and career and I know
that
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is
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many difficult
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to make continue your
study
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or find a job.
However
, I think it is better for you to try to get a job, and I would like to explain the reason why
Firstly
, I know your personality. You have always liked working and you do not enjoy going to college. Adding that, I remember that hard
studing
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studying
was the opposite of your morality.
Furthermore
, going to college is not beneficial for you because that will take all of your daily time, and you can't continue your interests in terms of work.
Thus
, I assume if you enter
to
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work life you will gain valuable experience that can build your CV ,and enhance your skills for future employment. In fact, I would recommend you to work in a big factory as a technical worker that matches your talent, and you can improve your skills as soon as possible.
Thus
,
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best situations for you.
Whereas
, I remember you have extreme talent
according to
technical methods.Adding that,I have many relationships and friends who are factory owners and I can find a good job for you easily.
To conclude
, I hope my suggestion helps you.I am looking forward to hearing from you.
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Grammar
Consider proofreading your letter for minor grammatical errors such as punctuation and capitalization. This will help to further improve the clarity and professionalism of your writing.
Lexical Resource
Try to use more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to make your letter more interesting and engaging.
Task Response
You have successfully addressed all parts of the task, providing clear reasons, explanations, and suggestions.
Tone
Your tone is friendly and supportive, which is appropriate for a letter to a friend.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Real-world experience
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • On-the-job training
  • Student loan debt
  • Personal growth
  • Professional networking
  • Career development
  • Skilled workers
  • Job market
  • Career goals
  • Immediate income
  • Professional relationships
  • Market demand
  • Defining interests
  • Educational investments
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