The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
This
map shows the plan for the town of Garldson
which has a population
of 65,000 citizens and,a new supermarket
S is planned and there are 2 possible sites for the supermarket
as well.
It is obvious that possible S2 location is located in the town centre which has no traffic zones and this
site is surrounded by a large space of industry.Whereas
,S1 plans is
to be located in Unnecessary verb
apply
countryside
and near the main roads as well.
S2 supermarkets may Add an article
the countryside
has
only one type of traffic which is a railway,and below there is a housing Change the verb form
have
estates
after crossing a small area of industry.Obviously, the location of the S2 Change the noun form
estate
supermarket
would be setted
closer for the majority of citizens in Correct your spelling
set
Garldson
whereas
from S2 to 16 km to Brandson there are 15000 population
and also
, from there to 25 km to Cransdon there are 29000 population
containing more than half of Garldson
population
.
S1 supermarket
may have 2 types of traffic which are main roads and railway as well.Naturally, there will be a small population
nearby due to
its location in the countryside.To be precise, there will be only 10000
Correct article usage
a 10000
population
of
the town of Change preposition
in
Garldson
which is lesser
than Correct word choice
less
a
number of people surrounding the S2 Correct article usage
the
supermarket
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