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The line graph indicated the information about the number of questionnaires collected from Tourist Information office in a city based on individual, letter/email and telephone by first 6 months in 2011.

The line graph indicated the information about the number of questionnaires collected from Tourist Information office in a city based on individual, letter/email and telephone by first 6 months in 2011.
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The given graph provides knowledge as to the total amount of surveys, which had been obtained from
Tourist
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the Tourist
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 Information
office
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Office
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 that were received by 3 different methods by the first half of 2011.
Overall
,
whereas
in person
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in-person
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 and telephone surveys increased their popularity over the
6-mouth
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6-month
period
,
decreasing
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a decreasing
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 number of people chose to attend by letter/email. At the beginning of the
period
,
telephone-based
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a telephone-based
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 survey was the most preferred means of collecting information among three options by around 900 attendees. After an unsignificant decrease in 1
mounth
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month
months
, it had become more popular and saw a peak of almost 1600 individuals by June. When it comes to
in person
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in-person
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quetionnaires
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questionnaires
questionnaire
, even though
it
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they
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 started as the least preferred by just over 400 citizens, it had soared to around 1900 people level and had become the most chosen one by the end of the
period
. In terms of e-mail/
letter
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letters
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, it gradually fell throughout the
period
 from just under 800 individuals to slightly under 400 people.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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