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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The presented map shows the town of Garlsdon with 65,000 population. A new shopping area (S) is proposed for the town. The layout indicates two projections for the supermarket. Looking at the details, the development of the market was planned in the
north
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northern
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 area of
countryside
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the countryside
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 that
has
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is
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 distanced
to
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apply
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12 km
to
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from
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Hindon
Correct article usage
the Hindon
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 population
10,000
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of 10,000
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. The other
projections
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projection
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 was in the town centre where there is no traffic congestion. It was located 16 km
to
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from
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 Bransdon population
15,000
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of 15,000
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add linking words.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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