The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The given pie charts and table illustrate the data about the amount of money that
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for
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police
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department and
also
the sources between 2017 and 2018, in Britain.
Overall
,
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tax area was
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contributor
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providing services in 2018.
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,
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was consumed only to enhance the utilities of technology. The list of security finance has
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rise in
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all sessions. In 2017, the state
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176
million
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was changed
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positive
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figure of 179
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million
in 2018.
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it can be seen in the question that tariff took part in
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of 91.2
million
and
then
it
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more 21
million
rupees , which shown 102.3m in the latter year. Other source and total divisions have
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imparted cash that
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as 38,.5
million
and 318.6
m
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million
in 2018, respectively.
On the other hand
, the percentage in
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area was constant, it was 17% over the whole expenditures.
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, the remuneration
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dropped
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6% in 2018, which was 75% in
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time.
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last
, the
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system found only interesting assistance, it went up slightly less double that was only 8% in 2017.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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