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In the future, nobody will buy printed paper or books because they will becomplete able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you ag ree or disagree?

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Over the
last
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 few decades,reading
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paper-
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paper books
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books
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 or newspapers
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 declined dramatically
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the
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technology and online sources.
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,it is predicted that the majority of
people
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 will have not purchased printed
paper
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 or
books
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 by some years later.I strongly disagree with
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 opinion and in
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 some significant examples. Some
people
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 believe that buying printed products will be demolished in the future,as online websites are costless for achieving any information which they need.Generally speaking,
people
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 can obtain everything from online sources regardless of paying money.Take artificial intelligence as an example.
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,in my view,the necessity of printed products and
books
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 will not be finished because online resources might be hacked and deleted.
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,if you maintain a book or a momentous document
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 your
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smartphone
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,they may be removed several times. One of the main reasons for my disagreement is that
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people
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 have
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 access to online websites without any costs,more and more communities in offices,schools and banks are using lined
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 in formal correspondences these days.
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 to say,chatting in online
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 may not be formal and reputable in offices and little do these communities prefer to use online networks.Another notable reason why I'm against
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this
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 idea is that some elderly
people
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 might not tend to buy a
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smartphone
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 and read
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 with cellphones.Clearly,
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the eagerness
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of using
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to use
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 online
books
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for
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in
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old
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older
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 generations can be significantly less than juveniles and elderly
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 may like to read
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books
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 because of
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 convenience.
To conclude
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,there is no doubt that some
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 expect to only search and get their data
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the
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mobile phones
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 of buying printed products in the future.
As a consequence
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,I personally think,using
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books
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 and lined papers are safer than online webs.
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