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the graph shows the number of people who visited three museums between 2000 and 2005. summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

the graph shows the number of people who visited three museums between 2000 and 2005. summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The graph shows the number of people who visited three museums in three difficult countries over a six-year period.
Overall
 , the greatest number of visits were for MET and National in 2005 ,
while
 for Endo it happened in 2000 and 2001 collectively. As we can see from the table , Endo was not as successful as MET and National in attracting
visitors
during
Change preposition
from
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 2000 to 2005 . in 2000 the number of
visitors
 at MET
were
Change the verb form
was
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 12
millions
Change to singular
million
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,
then
 for three
years
Add a comma
years,
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 it halved in
museum
 of
visitors
. After
that
Add a comma
that,
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 it started
increased
Change the verb form
to increase
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 significantly and
in
Change preposition
apply
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last
 year it had the most
visitors
of
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in
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this
 period. Among all
museum
Fix the agreement mistake
museums
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,
National
Correct article usage
the National
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museum
Capitalize word
Museum
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 was the most successful
museum
 in attracting people
during
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for
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 6 years , which started with 6
millions
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million
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visitors
 in 2000 and step by step ended up with more than 15
millions
Change to singular
million
show examples
visitors
. Endo had the most
visitors
 among the others in
first
Correct article usage
the first
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 two years , but it lost the game to other museums and inn
last
 year was in the
last
 position in comparison with others.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • decline
  • rise
  • fall
  • steady
  • trend
  • peak
  • reach a high/low point
  • increase/decrease
  • similar/different pattern
  • the number of visitors
  • museum names (e.g., Art Museum, History Museum, Science Museum)
  • time frame (e.g., in 2000, by 2005)
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