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The charts below show the proportions of the world's oil resources held in differentareas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of the world's oil resources held in differentareas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentages of the globe's grease and the
anual
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annual
 consumption of grease in 10 different
countries
.
Overall
,
although
 Middle
East
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 country has a higher proportion of renewable energy than others, the number of
anually
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annual
 usage is lower
whereas
 in Asia, the utilization of
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oil
 is much greater than the
resources
. As for
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Australia and New
Zealand
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Zealand,
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 both have the least
oil
resources
 out of ten
countries
. Looking at the top four biggest
oil
 holders, the Middle East held the
larger
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largest
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 amount of
oil
 which is 56.52% but less than one in ten of energy used.
Next,
Canada fell a close second with 14.84% of total
resources
while
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Central and
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South America placed in
third,
8.12%. The fourth place
go
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 to
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Africa with 6.38%. All of the mentioned
countries
 have spent less than the total
oil
 assets.
On the other hand
,
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Asia(26.12%), the United
State
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States
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(25.48%), and
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western Europe(19.24%), three of these
countries
 have
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 approximately
about
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a fifth
than
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of
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 the original total
oil
.
However
,
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Asia has the most significant intake rather
than
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to
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the others
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others
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other
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 two.
Similarly
,
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Australia and
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New Zealand both were using up more than
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they
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hold
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held
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.
However
, it stood at the least
resources
 compared to all ten nations.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, oil, resources with synonyms.
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