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the graph shows the number of students of three languages between 2020 and 2030. summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparision where relevant.

the graph shows the number of students of three languages between 2020 and 2030. summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparision where relevant.
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The graph shows predictions about how many
students
 will study three major languages between 2020 and 2030.
Overall
, it can be seen that there will be
a
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an
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 upward trend in
number
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a number
the number
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 of
students
 in all three languages.
Also
 English language will have the most
students
 from
beginning
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the beginning
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in
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of
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 2020 to the end
in
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of
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 2030. Looking at details , in 2020 Mandarin start at 100
millions student
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million students
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,
then
 will go up steadily till 2026 which will start overtaking Spanish in
number
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a number
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 of learners
.after
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After
 that in 2026 there will be a soar
500
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of 500
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and
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or
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 less than 600 in
years
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the years
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of
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2028 and 2030 respectively. Spanish will start at more than 200
millions
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million
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 and rise rapidly to more than 300 , After that in 2024 will rise by 50
millions
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million
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 every
tow
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two
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 years till 2028. Despite Spanish will start about more than 100
millions
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million
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Students
 in 2020 , it will finish with less than 100
millions
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million
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 learners in 2030. English will start at 550 and will increase sharply to 700 in 2024 . After that will drop to about 620 , next will sore significantly to around 750 , which is the peak of the graph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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