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the maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimsville. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparision where relevant.

the maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimsville. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparision where relevant.
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These two maps display recent changes which have taken place in the
city
 of
kimsville
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Kimsville
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 between the year 2002 and today.
Overall
, it can be seen that Kimsville has become a more modern
city
, with a new train station and software companies. If we look at the south of the map, the old cinema has
deconstructed
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been deconstructed
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 and a pub has been replaced in the south of
city
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the city
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 centre. Another change is that in the northern and southern west of the
map
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map,
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 trees have
cut
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been cut
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 down and replaced with new apartments and a football stadium respectively. One interesting change is that in 2002 there was a factory in the east of
city
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the city
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 centre which has
deconstructed
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been deconstructed
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 and a new software company
has been
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was
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 built there. A final interesting development of the
city
 is the new train station which has
constructed
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been constructed
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 in the west of the map where there was not any building there in 2002 and it is a good way of using empty spaces in the
city
.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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