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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The line graph illustrates the amount of carbon dioxide
emissions
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 an individual produced in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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, it can be seen that, through 40 years, the average carbon dioxide
emissions
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 per person in the United Kingdom and Sweden despite some fluctuations, had a declining trend.
Whereas
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, Portugal and Italy's rates increased over the past years.
to begin
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, in 1967 the amount of CO2 emitted by Swedish and British people stood at approximately 8.1 and 10 tonnes.
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, over the following 10 years, there was a sharp increase to 10 tonnes in Sweden.
Afterward
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, 1977 saw a dramatic decline in the CO2
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rate
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, which was followed by a gentle fall.
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, the UK followed a similar pattern.
At the end
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 of
this
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 period, the
rate
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 hit a low of 5.8 in 2007.
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, in countries with the opposite trends, Portugal and Italy, in 1967 the CO2
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rate
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 stood at 1.8 and 4. As the chart shows, Portugal had the lowest CO2
rate
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 per person in 1967.
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, from 1967 to 1997, CO2
emissions
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 in Italy and Portugal steadily rose.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, co, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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