he maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

#maps #show #changes #place #queen #mary #construction

The maps show the development which took place at the Queen Mary Hospital

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1960 and 2000.

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, a comparison of the three maps reveals dramatic changes from a public area to a

medical oriented

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landscape. In 1960, shown area’s infrastructure was simply constructed and made more for

human’s

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human

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facility

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facilities

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. By the year

1980

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1980,

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the most noticeable change

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apply

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buildings across the road,

shopping

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centre separated into

Cancer

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a Cancer

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centre and

pharmacy

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a pharmacy

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, which is connected with

hospital

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and the farmland changed into a nursing school. Changes between 1980 and 2000 were negligible, as nursing

school

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replaced

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were replaced

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by cancer

centre

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and

become

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one big construction.

Also

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half of the car park

have

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been taken for nursing school.

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he maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

Some people think that poverty is the reason behind most crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals, during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?