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he maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

he maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.
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The table provides budget data for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry across five years,
while
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 the pie chart illustrates the expected proportion of expenditures for the first
year
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.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that
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 Asia has the highest American dollars, followed by West Africa
along with
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 Central America having tinier allocation than
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 Asia,
as well as
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, the consumption is planned to be distributed among set-up costs, salaries, training and office expenses , with salaries receiving the largest percentage in
year
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 1. As can be seen from the figure ,
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Southeast
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 Asia starts with a $30
million
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budgeting
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budget
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 in the first
year
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 and increases significantly each period , reaching 50
million
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 dollars by
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year
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years
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 four and five.
In contrast
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 , Central America begins with twenty
million
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 in
year
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 one, and its money decreases more steadily, ending at $5
million
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 in
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year
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years
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 4-5.
On the other hand
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, West Africa has the fewest funds , outsets at $10,5
million
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 and rising to $3,5
million
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 by the fifth
year
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. As for the pie chart, it clarifies that in the first
year
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, earnings will have accounted for just under half per cent of the total expenditure. The remaining 20% will
have
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 divided equally between not only training but
also
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 office expenses, each receiving 10% of the finances.
Moreover
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, other left thirty
percentage
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per cent
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 of projected expenditure
belong
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 to the set-up costs

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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