The maps show changes that have taken place in grange park from 1920 to until now

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The map illustrates the previous plan for the village in 1920 and it is

current

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the current

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condition.

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, by having a cursory glance

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maps, it is noticeable that there are various modifications

has

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occurred

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which introduction of 1920 and the destruction of today

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the significant

one

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with, the park consisted of

rose

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the rose

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garden in the

north east

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northeast

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, but

this

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now has been replaced by

café

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a café

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and associated with pond water plants and

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now has

destroyed

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children’s

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the children’s

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play area. There was

fountain

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a fountain

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in the middle of the park which now has been converted

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rose

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a rose

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garden surrounded by seats.

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, we can see the maps now

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expanded by three

entrance

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and

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apply

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one of them

for

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is for

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car parking

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grassland which

replaced

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was replaced

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water

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a water

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feature in the south of the park.

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, the seats which

was

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located in the west north and west south of the parking

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been removed.

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,there was a stage for musicians , but

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now has been constructed by Amphitheatre for concerts for those who are interested

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the party.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.

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8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

185 words

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