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The maps show changes that have taken place in grange park from 1920 to until now

The maps show changes that have taken place in grange park from 1920 to until now
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The map illustrates the previous plan for the village in 1920 and it is
current
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the current
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 condition.
Overall
, by having a cursory glance
on
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 maps, it is noticeable that there are various modifications
has
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 occurred
in
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 which introduction of 1920 and the destruction of today
is
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the significant
one
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ones
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.
To begin
 with, the park consisted of
rose
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the rose
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 garden in the
north east
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, but
this
 now has been replaced by
café
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 and associated with pond water plants and
also
 now has
destroyed
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been destroyed
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 by
children’s
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the children’s
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 play area. There was
fountain
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a fountain
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 in the middle of the park which now has been converted
to
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rose
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a rose
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 garden surrounded by seats.
In addition
, we can see the maps now
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 expanded by three
entrance
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entrances
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and
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one of them
for
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is for
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 car parking
along with
 grassland which
replaced
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was replaced
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 by
water
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a water
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 feature in the south of the park.
On the other hand
, the seats which
was
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 located in the west north and west south of the parking
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 been removed.
Besides
,there was a stage for musicians , but
this
 now has been constructed by Amphitheatre for concerts for those who are interested
about
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 the party.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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