The maps show changes that have taken place in grange park from 1920 to until now

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The map illustrates the previous plan for the village in 1920 and it is

current

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condition.

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, by having a cursory glance

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maps, it is noticeable that there are various modifications

has

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occurred

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which introduction of 1920 and the destruction of today

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the significant

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with, the park consisted of

rose

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the rose

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garden in the

north east

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northeast

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, but

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now has been replaced by

café

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a café

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and associated with pond water plants and

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now has

destroyed

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children’s

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the children’s

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play area. There was

fountain

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a fountain

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in the middle of the park which now has been converted

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rose

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a rose

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garden surrounded by seats.

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, we can see the maps now

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expanded by three

entrance

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and

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one of them

for

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is for

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car parking

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grassland which

replaced

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water

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feature in the south of the park.

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, the seats which

was

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located in the west north and west south of the parking

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been removed.

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,there was a stage for musicians , but

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now has been constructed by Amphitheatre for concerts for those who are interested

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the party.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

185 words

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The maps show changes that have taken place in grange park from 1920 to until now

Do you agree that supermarkets are a threat to small shops and local communities?

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this idea?

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of problems and what measures could be taken to solve them.

These days it is much easier for many people to travel to different countries for tourism than in the past. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.