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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.
#electricity #power #station
The visual
represantation
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representation
delinates
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delineates
 how is produced
electricity
 in a
hydroelectricic
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hydroelectric
power
 station. The visual shows that
production
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the production
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 of
electricity
in
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apply
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differ
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differs
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 from day and night.
Overall
, there are several steps to generate
electricity
 with
water
.
Firstly
,
river's
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the river's
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water
 is
fulled
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filled
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 in a dam which is
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a high
the high
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high
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high-level
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level
reservoir
.
Dam's
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The dam's
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 gate is opened
in
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during
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day
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the day
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 and closed
in
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apply
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during the night time. The river's
water
 is flowed into the
power
 station to produce
electricity
 with a pipe.
Water
reach
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reaches
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to
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apply
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the
power
 station and
generator
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the generator
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produce
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produces
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 energy by reversible turbines. Produced energy is transferred to
national
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the national
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 grid via
power
 lines. During the night time,
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the low
a low
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low
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low-level
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level
reservoir
 is
fulled
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filled
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 with
a
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apply
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water
 and reversible turbines
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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pump
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a pump
the pump
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to
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apply
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water
 into
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the high
a high
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high
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high-level
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level
reservoir
.
Water
pass
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passes
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 through to pipe and
finally
is reached
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reaches
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to
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apply
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the
high
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high-level
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level
reservoir
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, power, water, level, reservoir with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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