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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.
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The visual
represantation
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representation
delinates
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delineates
 how is produced
electricity
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 in a
hydroelectricic
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hydroelectric
power
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 station. The visual shows that
production
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the production
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 of
electricity
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in
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apply
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differ
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differs
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 from day and night.
Overall
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, there are several steps to generate
electricity
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 with
water
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.
Firstly
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,
river's
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the river's
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water
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 is
fulled
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filled
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 in a dam which is
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a high
the high
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high
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high-level
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level
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reservoir
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.
Dam's
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The dam's
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 gate is opened
in
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during
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day
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the day
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 and closed
in
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apply
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during the night time. The river's
water
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 is flowed into the
power
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 station to produce
electricity
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 with a pipe.
Water
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reach
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reaches
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to
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apply
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the
power
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 station and
generator
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the generator
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produce
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produces
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 energy by reversible turbines. Produced energy is transferred to
national
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the national
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 grid via
power
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 lines. During the night time,
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the low
a low
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low
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low-level
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level
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reservoir
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 is
fulled
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filled
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 with
a
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apply
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water
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 and reversible turbines
is
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apply
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pump
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a pump
the pump
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to
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apply
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water
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 into
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the high
a high
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high
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high-level
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level
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reservoir
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.
Water
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pass
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passes
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 through to pipe and
finally
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is reached
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reaches
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to
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apply
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the
high
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high-level
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level
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reservoir
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, power, water, level, reservoir with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Reservoir
  • Penstock
  • Turbine
  • Generator
  • Transformer
  • High voltage
  • Renewable energy
  • Kinetic energy
  • Potential energy
  • Power grid
  • Sustainable
  • Flow rate
  • Energy conversion
  • Hydraulic pressure
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