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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
#minutes #bar #scores #teams #b #c #four #seasons #information #features #comparisons
The bar chart illustrates the information about the
score
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scores
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 of A, B and
C
team
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teams
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 in four different seasons.
Overall
,
team
 B is the highest ranked in all over
years
whereas
team
C
 is the least one. On the one hand,
team
 B
score
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scored
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 82
points
 in 2002, which
is
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apply
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gradually decreased in two
years
whereas
 it increased slightly in
last
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the last
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 year 2005 and reached 55
points
.
Additional
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Additionally
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,
team
C
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C's
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 results
was
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were
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 lower in 2002
that
is
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apply
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points
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point
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 5 but it
rises
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rose
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 upto 35
points
 in 2004 From that
years
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year
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 onwards the trends reserved, in
last
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the last
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years
 reached around starting
points
.
Lastly
,
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the C
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C
team
was
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apply
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increased by 5
point
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points
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 between 2002 and 2003 but the trend declined in
last
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the last
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 2
years
 by
the
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apply
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half
that
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which
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is goes
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is going
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 12point to
5point
Correct your spelling
5 points
 in
last
Correct article usage
the last
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 year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, that is, whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words c, team, years, points with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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