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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paritcular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paritcular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the figure of
visitors
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travel
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travelled
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 to the Caribbean island
in
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from
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 2010 until 2017. The unit given
is
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has
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millions
 of
visitors
.
Overall
, the whole number of tourists visiting the Caribbean island
have
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significant rose
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 over the recorded period.
However
, over
the
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time, they
were
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prefered
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preferred
 staying on
the
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cruise ships rather than on the
isle
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island
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. Looking at the total, in 2010, travellers stood at 1
millions
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million
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then
increases
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increased
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steady
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steadily
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 until 2015 before levelling off for two years with 2.7
millions
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million
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of
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visitors
. In 2017, it
reach
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reached
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to
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a peak point of 3.5
millions
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million
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of
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people. Regarding the night
spend
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, in
initial
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the initial
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 year, the island was chosen as the most popular place to stay compared to floating boats,
0.7
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with 0.7
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millions
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million
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 and 0.25
millions
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million
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of
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guests, respectively.
Although
 cruise ships have
a
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had a
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flactuation
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fluctuation
fluctuating
 trend for three years, it had increased sharply
through out
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throughout
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 the end of the year, accounting for 2
millions
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million
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of
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visitors
 in comparison to the accommodation in the retreat with 1.5
millions
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million
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of
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vacationers.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • upward trend
  • steady increase
  • peak
  • stabilization
  • notable change
  • market saturation
  • seasonal variations
  • tourism infrastructure
  • external factors
  • global economic conditions
  • persistent popularity
  • demand patterns
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