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The graph illustrates how crime rates altered in Panama City during the period 2010-2019. We can see immediately that the greatest change occurred in the number of burglaries, while incidents of theft remained low but steady.

The graph illustrates how crime rates altered in Panama City during the period 2010-2019. We can see immediately that the greatest change occurred in the number of burglaries, while incidents of theft remained low but steady.
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The line chart illustrates the number of incidents of three
type
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serious
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of serious
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 felonies in Panama
town
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 from 2010 until 2019.
Overall
, crimes
such
 as burglary and car theft had significantly
decline
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 over the recorded period, especially burglary
whereas
 robbery
has
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 a
vary
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 trend until the end of the year with the lowest misdeed digit in comparison to other
misdemeanous
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misdemeanours
misdemeanour
. Looking at the top two illegal acts,
the
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 initial year, burglary was the number one top violation with figures of 3400 incidents.
However
, in 2011, it had decreased sharply and reached
at
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the lowest point of 1000 cases in 2015 before fluctuating for 4 years with 1300 rates.
Next,
theft fell a close
second,
accounting for 2800 incidents. Over the
9 years
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9-year
 period, it stood at a slightly lower than
previous
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 amount, 2700 cases. Regarding robbery, it had the least incident compared to
other
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the other
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 two where in 2010, 650 criminals
have
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broke the laws
then
 it had
fluctuating
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a fluctuating
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 trend throughout the mentioned years, at which point ended at the same
numeral
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 in 2019.
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