The graph illustrates how crime rates altered in Panama City during the period 2010-2019. We can see immediately that the greatest change occurred in the number of burglaries, while incidents of theft remained low but steady.

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The line chart illustrates the number of incidents of three

type

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types

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serious

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of serious

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felonies in Panama

town

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from 2010 until 2019.

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, crimes

such

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as burglary and car theft had significantly

decline

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over the recorded period, especially burglary

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robbery

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vary

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trend until the end of the year with the lowest misdeed digit in comparison to other

misdemeanous

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misdemeanours

misdemeanour

. Looking at the top two illegal acts,

the

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initial year, burglary was the number one top violation with figures of 3400 incidents.

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, in 2011, it had decreased sharply and reached

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the lowest point of 1000 cases in 2015 before fluctuating for 4 years with 1300 rates.

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theft fell a close

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accounting for 2800 incidents. Over the

9 years

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9-year

period, it stood at a slightly lower than

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amount, 2700 cases. Regarding robbery, it had the least incident compared to

other

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two where in 2010, 650 criminals

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broke the laws

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it had

fluctuating

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trend throughout the mentioned years, at which point ended at the same

numeral

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in 2019.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

172 words

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