The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphic is showing us information about the production of
honey
by the
bees
.
Overall
, the production of
honey
consists
in
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7 steps, starting with the construction of the bee’s nest and finishing with the
honey
in a jar after the collection. The first step consists
in
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building the hives that have octagonal structures called
cells
.
Them
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Then
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, the
bees
leave the hives and fly in order to
found
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flowers to pollinate. When the
bees
finally
find a suitable flower, they extract their nectar. After that, the
bees
bring the nectar back to the
cells
in the hives. Once the
bees
have filled all the
cells
with nectar from the flowers, they start to flap their wings in order to produce
air flow
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airflow
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beginning, in that way the evaporation of water. When the water is totally evaporated, the
honey
in the
cells
is ready to collect and can be put in jars for human
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consumption
consuption
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consumption
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