Task 2 comment finding the history of building where you leave

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Please advise how to use the app to improve Coherence and Cohesion, and Task achievement?I did try to correct;The linking words: to have more than 7 worldsThe world repetition: less than 3 or fewerGrammar mistakes: almost zero mistakes- I think cannot it be expected to be zero with target of bank 7? The other 2 criterias which are Task Achievement, and Coherence & Cohesion I not sure how to improve about it. Likely, does the app not provide the recommendation to
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coherence cohesion
To enhance your coherence and cohesion, make sure to use a variety of linking words and phrases. This will help create smoother transitions between your ideas and paragraphs. Also, avoid overusing certain connectors like 'so' and 'because'. Consider breaking longer sentences into shorter ones to improve readability.
task achievement
For task achievement, ensure you fully address all parts of the task. Aiming to support your main points with specific examples and explanations will make your response more comprehensive. Try to elaborate on each point with clear, relevant examples related to the task topic; this will also help in making your essay more engaging and thorough.
task achievement
Your essay attempts to cover all required points, indicating a good understanding of the task.
task achievement
You’ve used a reasonable range of vocabulary, which generally fits the context of your essay. This is a strong point that aids in task achievement.
coherence cohesion
There is a clear effort to structure the essay with an introduction and conclusion. This is beneficial for coherence and cohesion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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