The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph presents the
number
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of businesses that ceased operations and the new businesses that were established during 2011 and 2018
Overall
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, In the initial
years
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years,
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the establishment of businesses started decreasing. In the middle of
timeline
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the timeline
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, the
closures
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and openings remained the same.
Furthermore
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, at
last
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,
closures
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rose steeply and remained unchanged. The total
number
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of shops opening in 2011 was around 9000.
This
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figure witnessed a sharp decline to approximately 4000 shop openings in 2012. From 2015 to 2017 it remained static. At
last
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, there were slight fluctuations.
On the other hand
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, In 2011 the
number
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of
closures
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of shops was around 7000.
However
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, from 2014 to 2015 the
number
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of
closures
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were at their decline. It Dropped dramatically and the
number
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of
closures
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of shops was below 1000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, closures with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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