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The bar chart below shows the amount of money invested in each categories from five organisations in 2015. Summarise the information bu selecting and reporting the main features, and make conparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the amount of money invested in each categories from five organisations in 2015. Summarise the information bu selecting and reporting the main features, and make conparison where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the data
of
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 investment in 4 different classifications from 5
campanies
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companies
 in 2015. The unit given is billion
Euros
.
Overall
, organisation B has spent more money in all categories, mainly on the building
whereas
 firm D has accumulated the lowest investment number in 2015. Looking at the top three higher funding
establishment
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establishments
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, company B has the significantly higher proportion in
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a fund
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fund
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funds
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 with
sum
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a sum
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up
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of 6.1
million
Euros
, especially the building with 1.7
million
Euros
then
reseach
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research
 around 1.6
million
Euros
while
 on the staff training at 1.5
million
Euros
, and
lastly
 from B is the
maachinery
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machinery
 accounted for 1.3
million
Euros
.
Coperation
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Corporation
 A fell a close
second,
with
total
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a total
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 number of 3.1
miilion
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million
Euros
. Organisation C placed third place with
entire
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 share at 2.3
million
Euros
. Regarding the lowest money allocation
leading
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 by company D with combined figures of all categories stood at 1.55
million
Euros
 where the research
has
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was
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 the least favoured, accounting for 0.3 billion
Euros
.
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