The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. 3
The diagram below illustrates what Anthropology graduates did after ending the same undergraduate course of degree.The table demonstrates the anthropologists’ salary improvement after 5
years’
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years
work
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of work
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pie-chart
which shows the destination of Anthropology graduates in percentages.Approximately the Correct your spelling
pie chart
pie-chart
is divided into 6 parts.The full-time workers Correct your spelling
pie chart
takes
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take
more
than half of the whole chart,Change preposition
up more
when
the rest parts take up less.
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while
Overall
, The table presents the salary improvement in 5 Linking Words
years
time.The greatest rise was in the Change noun form
years'
last
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year
.When Use synonyms
the
half of the workers got more than one hundred thousand dollars Correct article usage
apply
employment
.
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in employment
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apply
are
nearly had Verb problem
have
thier
job or continued studying,except the one portion.The Correct your spelling
their
not known
section takes less than a fifth of the draw, and it is unknown could they find their work or not.
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not-known
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the scheme,during the 5 Linking Words
year
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time
employees had definite employments which had differences in amount each Add a comma
time,
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last
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "improvement" was used 2 times.
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