The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. 3

The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. 3
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The diagram below illustrates what Anthropology graduates did after ending the same undergraduate course of degree.The table demonstrates the anthropologists’ salary improvement after 5
years’
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work
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.
Overall
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, It is a
pie-chart
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which shows the destination of Anthropology graduates in percentages.Approximately the
pie-chart
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is divided into 6 parts.The full-time workers
takes
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more
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up more
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than half of the whole chart,
when
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while
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the rest parts take up less.
Overall
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, The table presents the salary improvement in 5
years
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years'
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time.The greatest rise was in the
last
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year
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.When
the
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half of the workers got more than one hundred thousand dollars
employment
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in employment
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.
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with, all
the
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6 pieces
are
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nearly had
thier
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their
job or continued studying,except the one portion.The
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section takes less than a fifth of the draw, and it is unknown could they find their work or not.
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the scheme,during the 5
year
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time
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employees had definite employments which had differences in amount each
year
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.But it was concluded with a valuable increase in
last
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one
year
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.What changes the whole rest fractions
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "improvement" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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