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Task one the two pie charts show the patron of expenditure in US between 1966-1996. Summarise the information by selecting the reporting and main feature and making comparisons where relevant

Task one the two pie charts show the patron of expenditure in US between 1966-1996. Summarise the information by selecting the reporting and main feature and making comparisons where relevant
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The charts illustrate the amount of money that US people spend from 1966 to 1996.
Overall
, in 1966 humans used money mostly for essential needs and after 30 years, humans
spend
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spent
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 almost half of their budget
to
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on
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vicicles
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vesicles
bicycles
 and only
small
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a small
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 minority
to
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on
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 food . Turning to the details, in 1966 the leading position got food type, 44
percents
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percent
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 respectively.
Then
, adults paid to cars, nearly a third of
salary
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their salary
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. Other types of
spendings
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spending
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totally
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total
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 got 35% of
whole
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the whole
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 sum. In
compare
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comparison
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, most adults used only 1% of
wages
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their wages
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to
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for
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 technologies like computers,but in 1996
this
 number increased to 10%. In the second pie chart, more than half of
expenditure
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the expenditure
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used
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is used
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 for automobiles .In
the
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apply
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second place
it
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apply
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was
meat
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the meat
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 category with 14 % for both types
such
 as homemade food and
restorans
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restaurants
restorations
restaurant
.
Then
, 10% of wages people took to petrol category.
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