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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided maps illustrate the changes in the
road
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 access to City Hospital in the years 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, there were significant alterations in the layout design of the hospital surroundings. Notably, additional features
such
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 as a bus stop, roundabout, and car parks were introduced in the 2010 map. In 2007, the hospital was encircled by a ring
road
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.
However
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, in 2010, a public car park emerged to the east of the ring
road
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.
Furthermore
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, the
road
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 leading to the hospital was directly linked to both the ring
road
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 and the city
road
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 in 2007.
In contrast
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, in 2010, two roundabouts were installed to the south of the hospital, connecting the ring
road
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 and city
road
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.
Additionally
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, significant changes in the distribution of facilities occurred between the two years, including the relocation of the bus stop and the separation of the bus station to the western side of the hospital
road
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.
Moreover
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, in 2010, the staff car park was relocated to the eastern side of the
road
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, depicting a complete transformation of the hospital’s access and surrounding facilities.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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