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Some students prefer classes with frequent discussions between the professor and the students with almost no lectures. Other students prefer classes with many lectures and almost no discussions. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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There are contrasting views between
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 on whether is better to attend
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 with frequent
discussions
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 or with traditional
lectures
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 and no discussion. I find myself agreeing more with those who prefer
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 where there are frequent
discussions
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 between the professor and the
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 because I think that in
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way
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students
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 can benefit from them more. Many
students
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 prefer to attend
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 where the professor talks about the topic of the course and they can follow him taking notes. In
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 it is easier to keep up with studies because it is possible to go deep on the topics during the lessons and understand them better.
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, in my
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opinion,
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this
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 is not a really effective method for learning because the
lectures
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 do not stimulate any form of critical thinking and
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 if there are some doubts
students
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 can always reach out to a professor outside the class.
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, many
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 find
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 teaching method boring because they do not feel involved in the lesson.
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, many
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 prefer
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 with frequent
discussions
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 because they can develop more soft skills that go
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 than just understanding the topic. In
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 they can become better in public speaking because they can train to talk in front of large audience.
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,
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 allow
students
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 to develop their critical thinking and to better remember the arguments.
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, there are better grades in
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 who attend courses which
provides
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discussions
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instead
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 of simple
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.
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, there are some
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 who prefer to attend
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 with traditional
lectures
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 and other
students
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 who prefer to be challenged with frequent discussion. In my opinion,
discussions
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 are a more effective
way
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 to develop soft skills which can be important not only to succeed in
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 single course but to perform better in every other
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classes
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class
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 and later at work.

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language
Try to avoid repetition of the same words or phrases. For example, the words 'students' and 'discussions' are repeated quite often. Use synonyms or rephrase sentences to enhance variety and maintain reader interest.
task achievement
Work on providing more specific examples to support your points. For instance, instead of saying 'there are better grades in students who attend courses which provides discussions', you could provide a specific study or personal experience that illustrates this.
overall content
The introduction clearly states both viewpoints and gives your personal opinion, which is a strong way to start the essay.
coherence cohesion
You have a good logical structure with clear paragraphs discussing each viewpoint before providing your opinion.
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