The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town

The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town
The presented process shows the production of drinking
water
from rainwater in a
town
of
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in
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Australia.
Overall
, it is obvious that
production
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the production
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of drinking
water
does
nor
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not
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require complex steps (
comprise
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comprising
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5 simple steps), starting with collecting rain from the roof with special
pipe
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pipes
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and ending with
distribution
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the distribution
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of soft and clean
water
for citizens. Rainwater is collected via roofs of houses in
town
, specifically
roof
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the roof
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is responsible for separating
water
into pipes, followed by directing to the main large
tunel
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tunnel
, located under the
town
. Before the rainwater takes place in storage, it processes
filtering
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a filtering
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system. After storing
water
in
special
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a special
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place, it is sent to another underground barrel in order to receive treatment, adding
chemical
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chemicals
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during that process.
Finally
, treated
water
will be ready for drinking by people who live in that
town
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rainwater harvesting
  • rooftops
  • drains and gutters
  • underground storage tanks
  • water treatment plant
  • purification
  • filtration
  • chemical treatment
  • impurities
  • microorganisms
  • distribution system
  • potable water
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