IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3

The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town

The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The presented process shows the production of drinking
water
Use synonyms
 from rainwater in a
town
Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
in
show examples
 Australia.
Overall
Linking Words
, it is obvious that
production
Correct article usage
the production
show examples
 of drinking
water
Use synonyms
 does
nor
Correct your spelling
not
show examples
 require complex steps (
comprise
Wrong verb form
comprising
show examples
 5 simple steps), starting with collecting rain from the roof with special
pipe
Fix the agreement mistake
pipes
show examples
 and ending with
distribution
Add an article
the distribution
show examples
 of soft and clean
water
Use synonyms
 for citizens. Rainwater is collected via roofs of houses in
town
Use synonyms
, specifically
roof
Correct article usage
the roof
show examples
 is responsible for separating
water
Use synonyms
 into pipes, followed by directing to the main large
tunel
Correct your spelling
tunnel
, located under the
town
Use synonyms
. Before the rainwater takes place in storage, it processes
filtering
Correct article usage
a filtering
show examples
 system. After storing
water
Use synonyms
 in
special
Add an article
a special
show examples
 place, it is sent to another underground barrel in order to receive treatment, adding
chemical
Fix the agreement mistake
chemicals
show examples
 during that process.
Finally
Linking Words
, treated
water
Use synonyms
 will be ready for drinking by people who live in that
town
Use synonyms
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, town with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • rainwater harvesting
  • rooftops
  • drains and gutters
  • underground storage tanks
  • water treatment plant
  • purification
  • filtration
  • chemical treatment
  • impurities
  • microorganisms
  • distribution system
  • potable water
What to do next:
Look at other essays: