The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.
The presented process graph shows the production of drinking
water
from rainwater in a town
in Australia.
Overall
, it is obvious that the production of drinking water
does not require complex steps (comprising 5 simple steps), starting with collecting rain from the roof with special pipes and ending with the distribution of soft and clean water
to citizens.
Water
from rain is often used for different purposes, such
as drinking and washing. Therefore
, it requires several ways to collect it as efficiently as possible. First,
rainwater is collected via the roofs of houses in town
; specifically, the roof is responsible for separating water
into pipes, followed by directing to the main large tunnel, located under the town
. Before the rainwater takes place in storage, it undergoes a filtering system. After storing water
in a special place, it is sent to another underground barrel in order to receive treatment, adding chemicals during that process. Finally
, treated water
will be ready for drinking by people who live in that town
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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