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The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.

The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.
#rainwater #water #australian #town
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The presented process graph shows the production of drinking
water
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 from rainwater in a
town
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 in Australia.
Overall
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, it is obvious that the production of drinking
water
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 does not require complex steps (comprising 5 simple steps), starting with collecting rain from the roof with special pipes and ending with the distribution of soft and clean
water
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 to citizens.
Water
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 from rain is often used for different purposes,
such
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 as drinking and washing.
Therefore
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, it requires several ways to collect it as efficiently as possible.
First,
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rainwater is collected via the roofs of houses in
town
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; specifically, the roof is responsible for separating
water
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 into pipes, followed by directing to the main large tunnel, located under the
town
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. Before the rainwater takes place in storage, it undergoes a filtering system. After storing
water
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 in a special place, it is sent to another underground barrel in order to receive treatment, adding chemicals during that process.
Finally
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, treated
water
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 will be ready for drinking by people who live in that
town
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rainwater harvesting
  • rooftops
  • drains and gutters
  • underground storage tanks
  • water treatment plant
  • purification
  • filtration
  • chemical treatment
  • impurities
  • microorganisms
  • distribution system
  • potable water
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